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Mechagodzilla
12-03-2009, 05:19 PM
First, what do I compare creamy, soft skin to?
Secondly, If her eyes change color, what do I say about that?
CookiesForBreakfast
12-03-2009, 07:26 PM
Compare the skin to the soft, wet sand on the beach as the sea flows over it. :)
For the eyes, say they are like the leaves of a tree as it goes through the seasons
Mechagodzilla
12-03-2009, 07:52 PM
Wow cookies. I'm impressed. Thanks a lot!
CookiesForBreakfast
12-06-2009, 01:31 AM
Thanks. :D
netwalker
12-07-2009, 12:16 PM
Try this:

To what do I compare your soft, creamy skin?
What do I have to say, so you'll let me in?
A rose, a daffodil, a delicate embrace?
A moon, the sun, on each side of my face!
Your eyes like skies of heavenly hue,
Tonight your eyes changed to green from blue,
Unmasking the reptillian princess inside of you.
Snix
12-07-2009, 12:32 PM
WOW net, very nice writing there :P
stewlounse
12-07-2009, 12:39 PM
LMFAO ... nice ending.
Ramanag
12-07-2009, 05:26 PM
I'm trying to picture a situation where reptilian is a compliment. Nothing yet.
stewlounse
12-07-2009, 05:35 PM
Eyes changing color? lol
Mechagodzilla
12-07-2009, 06:33 PM
Interesting stuff Net, but I wouldn't feel right giving it to her if I didn't write it. Good ideas though.
netwalker
12-07-2009, 06:37 PM
Well the poem was a joke so I'll break it down:

To what do I compare your soft, creamy skin?
What do I have to say, so you'll let me in?
(Essentially, what do you want me to say so I can get in those pants you're wearing?)

A rose, a daffodil, a delicate embrace?
A moon, the sun, on each side of my face!
(Clearly describing the lost art of titty motorboating, e.g. the sun and the moon are both round like a titty.)

Your eyes like skies of heavenly hue,
Tonight your eyes changed to green from blue,
Unmasking the reptillian princess inside of you.
(She's a reptillian shapeshifter.)
stewlounse
12-07-2009, 06:43 PM
LOL totally goodness.
Mechagodzilla
12-07-2009, 07:51 PM
Why did I not see any of that. Lol I feel stupid.
netwalker
12-07-2009, 09:10 PM
You are not stupid. Now chin up, bring love to people. U see my breastfeeding avatar? That baby is consuming the life essence from a titty. I want you to go out and milk the titty called life.
CookiesForBreakfast
12-08-2009, 10:53 PM
You are not stupid. Now chin up, bring love to people. U see my breastfeeding avatar? That baby is consuming the life essence from a titty. I want you to go out and milk the titty called life.


You're an interesting fellow.